User talk:AndreCarrotflower/Modern architecture in Buffalo and vicinity

Looking for feedback from someone with a casual interest in, but not an advanced-level familiarity with, architecture
Due to the need to check through all the articles for COVID-related business closures, it's now very unlikely that the Buffalo district reorganization will be complete in the next few months as I'd originally hoped. So, in place of running one of the new district articles as a summer 2021 OtBP as I'd also hoped, I've been working feverishly on the Modern architecture in Buffalo and vicinity itinerary in my userspace, with a view to a FTT feature (and ahead of a visit from an out-of-town friend this week, an architecture buff with a taste for things Midcentury, with whom I plan to do a dry run of the tour).

My question is this. In writing the article, I tried to make it accessible to the layperson yet (within reason) also to get into the nitty-gritty of architectural theory in a way that would resonate with those with more advanced knowledge. So I'm wondering if there's anyone here who's not knowledgeable about architecture in a more-than-casual way who could read through what I've written and let me know if I've struck the right balance or if it all flies over your head. (Keep in mind also that a lot of what's not explained in the itinerary itself will be explained in the "Understand" section, which I've already sketched out in outline form so you'll have an idea of which blanks will be filled in). Additionally, if it is too advanced for the layperson, is that really a problem per se or are we free to assume that anyone who'd click through to read an article on Modernist architecture would most likely be armed with some degree of advance knowledge on the subject?

-- AndreCarrotflower (talk) 04:45, 25 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Anyone? -- AndreCarrotflower (talk) 20:31, 28 August 2020 (UTC)


 * As it is a long article, I have only given it a quick read. Understand needs to be fleshed out. A brief paragraph on Buffalo's development over this period would give some context - how much did the city expand over these years? The substyles of Modernism should be explained - I had never heard of Googie, but this appears to be a style unique to the US.


 * Generally the individual building descriptions were pitched about right, although some could be trimmed - descriptions of the buildings that used to occupy the site are of little interest to visitors. If there is anything in particular to look at on a building, this should be pointed out (this may not be so relevant for modernist rather than ornate buildings).


 * As an itinerary there is still some work required. A dynamic map and geo should be added. An introduction should say how long the sections of the route are. It might be better as two separate articles - a downtown walking tour and a suburban driving tour; not everybody will want to do both and some may want to do the driving section first (due to weather or car availability). Some buildings appear likely to be open to visitors: the Metro Rail Station and the Recreation Center; is it worth going inside? AlasdairW (talk) 23:11, 28 August 2020 (UTC)